I think what would make this work better is if you told me a story where the moral is "Streak 7 kicks ass". This feels like a lot of words about features that could otherwise be a list: * 7" widescreen * Organize with memory cards * Built in Wifi * Security features.
Maybe it's personal preference, but if I have to read more then a twitter post's length of text something better happen! I'm curious about what would happen if you picked one feature and wrote a short about it, took the 200 words and made a narrative instead of a list. Really explain how 7" qualifies as a widescreen and how it could make a difference in my life.
I think what would make this work better is if you told me a story where the moral is "Streak 7 kicks ass". This feels like a lot of words about features that could otherwise be a list:
ReplyDelete* 7" widescreen
* Organize with memory cards
* Built in Wifi
* Security features.
Maybe it's personal preference, but if I have to read more then a twitter post's length of text something better happen! I'm curious about what would happen if you picked one feature and wrote a short about it, took the 200 words and made a narrative instead of a list. Really explain how 7" qualifies as a widescreen and how it could make a difference in my life.