I really like the last two lines of this ad: "Waking up doesn't have to be expensive, it just needs to taste great." Those lines really nails what you're trying to say.
The middle seems like a bit much, and I'd be a little skeptical as a buyer. When someone says "CHEAP AND GREAT TOO!" it sets off warning bells. It also kind of makes me wonder if there's a facebook for Flavor Profiles.
I'd be tempted to keep the first and last paragraphs, maybe boil it down a little further. Those two lines are REALLY strong though!
I really like the last two lines of this ad: "Waking up doesn't have to be expensive, it just needs to taste great." Those lines really nails what you're trying to say.
ReplyDeleteThe middle seems like a bit much, and I'd be a little skeptical as a buyer. When someone says "CHEAP AND GREAT TOO!" it sets off warning bells. It also kind of makes me wonder if there's a facebook for Flavor Profiles.
I'd be tempted to keep the first and last paragraphs, maybe boil it down a little further. Those two lines are REALLY strong though!
Thanks.
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